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Devo/Murphy Carpenter's avatar

Creepy and cool well done

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you! I was really happy with how it turned out.

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Ivo Ziskra's avatar

This is a stunning story. The characters are great. I liked the unopened mail part. Everything flowed so well.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you! I’m really glad to hear that. It was a challenge to squeeze everything into a flash fiction, so I’m really glad it still flows well. 😁

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Ivo Ziskra's avatar

You're welcome.

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

Oh my gosh, this was so real it hurts. Fantastic characters!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you, Maryellen! I knew this one was going to be tough for people to read, just given the subject matter, but I’m really proud of how it turned out.

Interesting fact: Windsor Technology is a company from my upcoming novel, so this story is sort of set outside of that, but in the same world.

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

Oh I love this, world building wondsrful!!!

You should be proud, this is phenomenal. The characters step off the page in this one.

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Sarah Rusch's avatar

I loooove this. It reminds me of that mothered game that we played. Awesome work!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Haha, I was hoping you would say that! I thought the same thing while I was working on it.

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Chef Chris 🎃's avatar

Captivating story! I love the line "I keep thinking that if I look away, she’ll just be gone again." I would think that too.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you, Chris! Yeah, I wanted to really drive home the surreal nature of the experience for the father. So glad you liked it!

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[ 2D ]'s avatar

Bradley! So charming… and yet, so sinister. A true paradox. 😈🤍🔥

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