This was an entertaining read and listen! Thanks for sharing. Your writing is evocative. I enjoyed the doctor asking if he'd like to know exact day and hour of his death, but I wonder if hour and minute would be more appropriate? I thought the story might end before we got to the killing but we completely followed through, it was a horrifying delight.
Hey Molly, thank you so much for checking it out! Your feedback is excellent, and I agree that hour and minute would work better there. I’ll make that edit for future readers.
I have a content directory pinned to my publication’s home page with links to all my short stories, poetry, and articles as well! If you enjoyed this piece, I would recommend checking out the stories in my directory set within my horror mythos called The Synaptic Sprawl.
Plenty of scares to be found in those, and lots of connections between them as well!
Thank you for bringing my imagination’s worst way to die to life! After listening to your narration, I’m probably going to have nightmares for a week seriously.
Thanks alot!! 🤣😂🤣 I'm going to have to sleep with a light on tonight!
Jokes aside, this was incredibly well written. I read it myself first and thought I was fine… until I listened to the audio. That’s when it really scared the daylights out of me!
The killer being a taxi driver and a doctor and a painter? Such a freaky combination! And setting it in a hospital made it even more disturbing. I already hate hospitals LOL
The way you write makes everything come alive I felt like I was right there, watching it all unfold like some creepy voyeur.
Also, amazing job with the sound effects. They added so much to the atmosphere. Really, really well done! It definitely set the mood
And that murderer? Chilling. The red glowing eyes alone were enough to haunt me, but the fact that he paints with human blood to keep himself from aging?
That’s the stuff of nightmares. The image of him in that fedora, the shoulder length curls framing a face that shouldn't still look so young, is so vivid it’ll stick with me for a while.
The moment he kidnapped the detective and declared him his next muse? I actually got chills. It’s such a twisted blend of obsession, vanity, and horror.
He’s not just a killer he’s an artist of death, and that’s what makes him terrifying.
Thank you so much for this amazing review, Tara! This story was one of my first attempts at writing a serial killer, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it! I've been working on polishing and improving my narrations as well in recent months, so I'm really glad you liked what I did here with that as well.
Really appreciate the support! I'm excited to check out your work soon as well!
P.S: I do apologize for any and all nightmares, by the way! 😅
You honestly did such a great job!! All nightmares are forgiven 😆 LOL in advance! Lol but I will come back here and haunt your post with a full description if I get one for real 🤣😂🤣
I promised I’d be back to tell you about my nightmare… and lo and behold, here I am! 😆
I’m in that hospital hallway you wrote about (although your story feels like a lullaby compared to this), I wake up groggy and strapped to a gurney only to find a lanky, shadowy weirdo whose sole obsession is stealing exactly one of my shoes. Not both, just one. Then boom the scene resets, and he’s at it again like a deranged footwear DJ on infinite loop. Ugh, seriously dude, what’s with the one shoe fetish?! It was the creepiest dream ever!
This was an entertaining read and listen! Thanks for sharing. Your writing is evocative. I enjoyed the doctor asking if he'd like to know exact day and hour of his death, but I wonder if hour and minute would be more appropriate? I thought the story might end before we got to the killing but we completely followed through, it was a horrifying delight.
Looking forward to the next one!
Hey Molly, thank you so much for checking it out! Your feedback is excellent, and I agree that hour and minute would work better there. I’ll make that edit for future readers.
I have a content directory pinned to my publication’s home page with links to all my short stories, poetry, and articles as well! If you enjoyed this piece, I would recommend checking out the stories in my directory set within my horror mythos called The Synaptic Sprawl.
Plenty of scares to be found in those, and lots of connections between them as well!
Very cool, thanks! I’ll definitely give those a read.
Thank you for bringing my imagination’s worst way to die to life! After listening to your narration, I’m probably going to have nightmares for a week seriously.
Thanks alot!! 🤣😂🤣 I'm going to have to sleep with a light on tonight!
Jokes aside, this was incredibly well written. I read it myself first and thought I was fine… until I listened to the audio. That’s when it really scared the daylights out of me!
The killer being a taxi driver and a doctor and a painter? Such a freaky combination! And setting it in a hospital made it even more disturbing. I already hate hospitals LOL
The way you write makes everything come alive I felt like I was right there, watching it all unfold like some creepy voyeur.
Also, amazing job with the sound effects. They added so much to the atmosphere. Really, really well done! It definitely set the mood
And that murderer? Chilling. The red glowing eyes alone were enough to haunt me, but the fact that he paints with human blood to keep himself from aging?
That’s the stuff of nightmares. The image of him in that fedora, the shoulder length curls framing a face that shouldn't still look so young, is so vivid it’ll stick with me for a while.
The moment he kidnapped the detective and declared him his next muse? I actually got chills. It’s such a twisted blend of obsession, vanity, and horror.
He’s not just a killer he’s an artist of death, and that’s what makes him terrifying.
Thank you so much for this amazing review, Tara! This story was one of my first attempts at writing a serial killer, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it! I've been working on polishing and improving my narrations as well in recent months, so I'm really glad you liked what I did here with that as well.
Really appreciate the support! I'm excited to check out your work soon as well!
P.S: I do apologize for any and all nightmares, by the way! 😅
You honestly did such a great job!! All nightmares are forgiven 😆 LOL in advance! Lol but I will come back here and haunt your post with a full description if I get one for real 🤣😂🤣
I promised I’d be back to tell you about my nightmare… and lo and behold, here I am! 😆
I’m in that hospital hallway you wrote about (although your story feels like a lullaby compared to this), I wake up groggy and strapped to a gurney only to find a lanky, shadowy weirdo whose sole obsession is stealing exactly one of my shoes. Not both, just one. Then boom the scene resets, and he’s at it again like a deranged footwear DJ on infinite loop. Ugh, seriously dude, what’s with the one shoe fetish?! It was the creepiest dream ever!