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Isabella Nesheiwat's avatar

Bradley, this is incredible!! The second person perspective really added that nostalgic CYOA vibe. I loved the world-building: it really showed your mastery of the cyoa format. Incredible work 🤎🤎

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Yes! I was hoping people would pick up on the nostalgia vibe. I loved the old CYOA Goosebumps as a kid, so this was my first try at doing my own!

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Isabella Nesheiwat's avatar

Well you slayed it so hard my guy!! Fantastic work as always

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J.S. Ceballos's avatar

Very cool. I'll have to re-read the other paths! Thanks for the fun read.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you so much for checking it out! Which ending did you get? I'd love to know. Please let me know how you like the other paths, too

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J.S. Ceballos's avatar

I ended at C!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Awesome! That's the "true ending" for me.

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Rebecca A Barrett's avatar

I ended with A. I love choose your own adventure books! It's been so long since I've read one. I'll have to go back and explore the other endings. Thanks for a great read!

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Hazel's avatar

This was pretty cool, love how its all set up. Though I'm not a fan of being told right away whether my choice is leading to an ending section or not. I get that's probably for structure restraints. Definitely will have to revisit this for the other parts!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thanks for checking it out! Yeah, I don’t like revealing where the choice leads, but app users can’t click the choices so I had to tell them where to scroll. Not ideal, hopefully they’ll add the anchor links to the app soon, since that would remove the issue entirely.

Appreciate the feedback though!

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Hazel's avatar

Absolutely! Aside from that it was an incredibly well-written piece!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Really glad to hear that! Appreciate the support!

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@mindset&mythos's avatar

That sounds amazing. I want to try that? What's the site link?

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@mindset&mythos's avatar

Thank you. I'll see what they're up to.

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@mindset&mythos's avatar

Neat narrative. I wonder what this would be like with visuals.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Oh man, that would probably look incredible. I mean, I'm biased, but if I picture all this tech and settings in my head it would be amazing in art form.

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@mindset&mythos's avatar

Have you tried working with an artist and/or game designers?

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

I haven't I actually heard today about this new app launching called Audio Mazes and I applied to be a writer there. They are doing immersive choose your own adventures with art, music, sound design, the works.

So, if I get accepted, I'll be able to do stories like this on an entirely new level.

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