You paced this perfectly, and the change within the character is so well done! It's crazy how it really just takes a switch, I love that detail so much.
Thank you, Mina! It's been interesting to come back to this world where Burnout is a sort of mental illness that has serious consequences.
I'm really glad you liked the pacing as well, I focused particularly on that aspect of the story this time to try and get the intensity to match the track. Thanks for the awesome feedback as always!
WOW this was insane!
You paced this perfectly, and the change within the character is so well done! It's crazy how it really just takes a switch, I love that detail so much.
Thank you, Mina! It's been interesting to come back to this world where Burnout is a sort of mental illness that has serious consequences.
I'm really glad you liked the pacing as well, I focused particularly on that aspect of the story this time to try and get the intensity to match the track. Thanks for the awesome feedback as always!
Because they deserved it. 💎
I'm glad that line stood out to you. I love using italics to drive home emphasis on certain lines in my stories.