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Ellen Y. Mueller's avatar

Great story!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you, Ellen! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Karen Novak's avatar

I loved the structure, and you rendered the imagery with a truly vivid but restrained touch. The hero/victim push and pull is the real hook for me here for me. This is a new genre for me, so I don’t feel confident enough to comment much beyond the fact I really enjoyed the read. Hoping to read more soon.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Hey Karen, thank you so much for checking it out! I'm so happy that you enjoyed it, especially as someone who doesn't read a lot of horror. Very happy to have you here! My stories and poetry move between horror, sci-fi, and fantasy, so I'd like to think there's something for everyone. Appreciate you!

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Isabella Nesheiwat's avatar

Absolutely amazing! I am blown away. The audio added such a unique aspect to this, that really elevated the piece, and the medical aspect of the horror was so unique and unexpected and so well-done! Another banger.....another banger from Bradley from The Writers Journey!

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Yes! I'm so glad you liked the audio. It's been a while since I've done a whole audio narration, so I was rusty! I love that slogan, "Another banger from Bradley," haha.

Well, in that case, stay tuned, because we're just getting started.

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Devo/Murphy Carpenter's avatar

Just slow down your reading 😀 40 years of theatre training that is my biggest foe too

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Great feedback, thank you! Yeah, I tend to rush in the action scenes in particular. Thank you for checking it out!

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Isabella Nesheiwat's avatar

the rust did not peek through! and i cannot wait to hear and read more from you!!!

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J. D. Lair's avatar

Dang dude! This was a super thrilling read. Loved the concept and your execution was great! The repetition towards the end was a nice touch.

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Thank you! I remember when I got the idea I sort of copy/pasted the beginning and made minor changes to drive home that Deja Vu feeling. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Devo/Murphy Carpenter's avatar

So good you need to submit this

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